I hear it calling out to me from everywhere.
No, I tell myself.
Don't listen.
Don't obey.
The more it calls out to me, the harder it is to resist.
After toying with the idea, I finally give in.
Later, I wish I hadn't, knowing I can't take it back.
Will there ever be a cure for this addiction?
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First off, I’d just like to say that I think it is awesome Kelly was inspired by an episode of intervention. It’s a really good idea and I’ll definitely be looking into it! Anyways, I think this is a good poem but I think with a little tweaking it has the potential to be a-freakin’-mazing. It has a lot of room of expansion… at the end of the poem I was left wanting more. There are really deep seeded emotions when dealing with drug addiction and I think she pokes at them but I know she has the potential to beat the hell out of them and put them on the paper (…internet… blog… whatever). She says it’s “calling out to me”… What is it saying? I want to know how the person feels when they are resisting, how is the body reacting to the withdrawal, how long does it take to give in, how does she feel when she finally gets her fix and what is the reaction when the realization of her failure sets in? I really like the “don’t listen / don’t obey” part. It’s simple but powerful. I just wanted to yell “NO DON’T DO IT!” at my computer screen.
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